I am a Year 6 student in the Uru Mānuka Cluster. This is a place where I will share my learning. Please note that some of it will not be complete, it will be my first drafts. Remember to be positive, thoughtful and helpful when you leave me a comment.
Bonjour Kaizah-Rae Its me Addison I like the way you did everything on your blog I think you did really well on this blog keep it up. You taught me about the wind I didn't really know that stuff about the wind and you should be happy that you taught someone about the wind. How come one slide had a polygraph but the others didn't anyway it doesn't really matter. Make sure you read back and look at it to see if it makes sense but otherwise this is all good. Sincerely Addison.
Kia Ora, I really think your post needs more description, but I still didn't learn that much from the slide, so I think you should add more to it so that you can show how much effort you put in it, maybe it's better if you add more decorations, Why is there not much things in to the slide, I probably recommend you to like make an infographic other than the slide, The slide is very short but atleast you have something in the slide, maybe you can make a animation for more entertainment, maybe you can update it to make it more better, maybe make the end to "thank you for viewing this blog post, I hope you enjoy it a lot." I hope you understand what I mean. Other than that, great post btw.
Kia Ora Kaizah-Rae. I like your blog post about where does wind come from. I have always wanted to know where wind comes from. Maybe next time you could add a part at the top where it says what your blog post is about and also maybe add more to the facts?
good job on this you did i great job i like your answers and you background and all your other stuff maybe next time you could put more detail in this by Linny in nalanne's devies
Kia ora Kaisah-Rae, You have done a good job on this, Why did you do this?, would you want to do this again?, next time you could add more writing and information about this, because I don't know why you did this, that's all from me, see you later.
Kia Ora Kaizah-Rae, Acasia here I Like the way how you done it so it is easy to read. Maybe next time you could do your next step on what you think your going to do next time? You could have added more information so people know more about it and not just a little bit. I think this blog post is great it just needs a little more information.
Please structure your comments as follows: Positive - Something done well. Thoughtful - A sentence to let us know you actually read/watched or listened to what they had to say. Helpful - Give some ideas for next time or Ask a question you want to know more about.
Bonjour Kaizah-Rae Its me Addison
ReplyDeleteI like the way you did everything on your blog I think you did really well on this blog keep it up.
You taught me about the wind I didn't really know that stuff about the wind and you should be happy that you taught someone about the wind.
How come one slide had a polygraph but the others didn't anyway it doesn't really matter.
Make sure you read back and look at it to see if it makes sense but otherwise this is all good.
Sincerely Addison.
hi that is very
ReplyDeleteKia Ora, I really think your post needs more description, but I still didn't learn that much from the slide, so I think you should add more to it so that you can show how much effort you put in it, maybe it's better if you add more decorations, Why is there not much things in to the slide, I probably recommend you to like make an infographic other than the slide, The slide is very short but atleast you have something in the slide, maybe you can make a animation for more entertainment, maybe you can update it to make it more better, maybe make the end to "thank you for viewing this blog post, I hope you enjoy it a lot." I hope you understand what I mean. Other than that, great post btw.
ReplyDeleteKia Ora Kaizah-Rae.
ReplyDeleteI like your blog post about where does wind come from. I have always wanted to know where wind comes from.
Maybe next time you could add a part at the top where it says what your blog post is about and also maybe add more to the facts?
Blog you later.
bula vinaka kaiza ray
ReplyDeletegood job on this you did i great job i like your answers and you background and all your other stuff maybe next time you could put more detail in this by Linny in nalanne's devies
Kia ora Kaisah-Rae,
ReplyDeleteYou have done a good job on this, Why did you do this?, would you want to do this again?, next time you could add more writing and information about this, because I don't know why you did this, that's all from me, see you later.
Kia Ora Kaizah-Rae, Acasia here
ReplyDeleteI Like the way how you done it so it is easy to read. Maybe next time you could do your next step on what you think your going to do next time? You could have added more information so people know more about it and not just a little bit. I think this blog post is great it just needs a little more information.
Kia Ora Kaizah Rae,
ReplyDeleteGreat facts about the wind! Next time you could add more words on each slide. But great job!